题目回顾
以《剑桥雅思12》Test 5的小作文为例： 下图显示某国三种能源（石油、天然气、煤炭）的产量和消费量变化（1980-2020），总结信息并比较数据。
高分范文
The line graph illustrates changes in the production and consumption of three energy sources (oil, natural gas, and coal) in a particular country between 1980 and 2020.
Overall, oil remained the dominant energy type despite fluctuations, while coal showed a steady decline in both production and usage. Natural gas witnessed significant growth, becoming the second most consumed resource by the end of the period.
In 1980, oil production stood at 100 million tonnes, nearly double its consumption (55 million). Over the next two decades, production peaked at 130 million in 2000 before dropping to 90 million by 2020. Conversely, consumption rose consistently, reaching 85 million tonnes in the final year.
Natural gas started as the least utilized energy, with 20 million tonnes produced and 15 million consumed. However, both figures surged after 1990, surpassing coal by 2010. By 2020, production hit 70 million tonnes, slightly higher than consumption (65 million).
Coal’s figures displayed a downward trend. Initially, 60 million tonnes were produced and 50 million consumed, but both values halved by 2020. This decline mirrored global shifts toward cleaner energy alternatives.
写作技巧解析
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结构清晰
- 引言段：改写题目，明确数据范围。
- 总述段：概括核心趋势，避免细节。
- 主体段：按能源类型分段，突出对比与转折。
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数据选取
- 关键节点（起点、终点、峰值）必须包含。
- 避免罗列所有数据，优先描述显著变化。
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语言精准
- 动词：peaked, plummeted, stabilized.
- 副词：gradually, sharply, marginally.
- 比较句型：While X increased, Y decreased.
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时态与语法
- 过去时为主（描述已发生的变化）。
- 被动语态慎用，保持句式多样性。
常见错误规避
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信息遗漏
- 未比较生产与消费量的差异。
- 忽略某类能源的趋势。
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表述模糊
- 错误示例：Coal went up and down.
- 修正为：Coal production fluctuated between 40 and 60 million tonnes before a sharp drop post-2010.
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过度主观
避免猜测原因，如“因政策变化导致”。
备考建议
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限时练习
20分钟内完成，模拟考场压力。
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范文仿写
分析官方范文的用词与逻辑，提炼模板句。
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数据敏感度
多练习折线图、饼图等高频题型，培养快速抓取趋势的能力。
雅思小作文的核心是客观与简洁，通过逻辑分组、准确描述和规范语言，即使复杂数据也能清晰呈现，坚持针对性训练,分数提升水到渠成。
